Matthew's Personal Conflict Narrative

The key to having the best personal conflict ever: Putting yourself out there. From reading both of the essays I realized the biggest difference between the two was the amount of detail and emotion put into his final draft. By Matthew describing his passion for music to us and using specific examples of conversations he had with people made me feel like I was there with him. The first draft I kind of just read and kind of understood his problem but it wasn't very moving or interesting to me, but the final draft blew my mind! I felt like I was in the club with him, I could feel his frustration and pain when he realized that his dreams were always going to be just dreams.

The universal theme of having a passion was something I could connect with. When he said, "The feeling I had on stage was like a drug inducded high. The rush was so intense that I became a junkie of music." I totally knew how he felt. I am a dancer and although it isn't my dream to become a dancer I live for the feeling of performing on stage; its something that is unexplainable and irreplaceable. Since I started college I haven't danced and I really miss it. He also mentioned that music was a therapy for him, when he started playing all his pain and worries went away, it was just him and his music. I feel the same exact way when I dance. You just get so in tune with music that you can't help but just forget about what was bothering you that day and just enjoy the moment that you have right in front of you.

While I write my personal conflict essay I will be thinking about Matthew's. I will try my hardest to just put my all into to. I don't want to be afraid to put every detail I can think about. I want someone to read it and feel as though they lived through it with me. Reading his final draft was so much easier than reading his first draft because he explained things thoroughly and didn't just think people would understand. That I think will be something I'm going to have to take time to work on because I know how I felt and what went on but my readers won't. I also I appreciated reading this because I had no clue how to start mine and I always appreciate an example. This also got me very excited about starting mine. Overall a great read!